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Give me your honest opinion...


I remember the first time we touched
My hand gently slid into yours
I remember the first time we kissed
Our lips softly, gently brushing together

I remember the first time I felt the beat of your heart
My hand lay lovingly on your strong chest
I remember the first time we made love
The strength of you between my soft thighs

I remember the first time you said, "I love you"
My soul feeling complete as I whispered it back
I remember when I silently pledged myself to you
I gave you my heart.


What do you think? I am going to give it to my boyfriend, so I want opinions!


( 15 comments — Leave a comment )
Sep. 13th, 2002 05:07 pm (UTC)
I'm not sure about the "soft thighs" part.. kinda changes the tone of the entire thing :P
Sep. 13th, 2002 05:09 pm (UTC)
lol...that was a contrast of his "manliness" vs. my feminity

Other than that, what did you think?
Sep. 13th, 2002 05:29 pm (UTC)
not bad :)
Sep. 13th, 2002 05:57 pm (UTC)
i disagree, i like the soft thighs bit.

not sure about the "heart swelled with emotion" bit, that'd tell him that you're all his no matter what.

i like girls who don't do so. that's to remind me that i have to make a lot of effort to keep them. i suppose that make a relationship more fun, exciting and sexy.

or perhaps that's just me, as i don't fancy a new relationship with someone who sort of 'stalk' me around. not that i like flirting (i never do, and i take a relaltionship very seriously), just like to keep guessing :)

sorry if i don't make any sense. nevertheless, the poem's good.

ps - this is my first lj post, so .. :/
Sep. 13th, 2002 06:01 pm (UTC)
lol...we are engaged
Sep. 13th, 2002 06:34 pm (UTC)
I'm confused.. what was the "got my necklace and phone back" or whatever post all about?
Sep. 13th, 2002 06:35 pm (UTC)
It is sort of a weird story. We were having a lot of problems. I got mad so I gave him back the necklace, which I just got back not too long ago. Things are okay now, they were just really rough the past 2.5 months
Sep. 13th, 2002 06:31 pm (UTC)
Soft thighs? Better hit the treadmill....
Sep. 13th, 2002 06:37 pm (UTC)
lol...hey now...I work out everyday...not too fond of the treadmill, but love eliptic machine and aerobics! :)

Is that your opinion? Should I say hard thighs? Like I was telling cozmo it was meant as a comparison between his "manliness" and my "femininity"
Sep. 13th, 2002 08:34 pm (UTC)
Maybe she means soft as in "smooth skin," not "mushy, blobby fat"...
Sep. 13th, 2002 09:32 pm (UTC)
Re: Hmmm...
lol...that is what I meant
Sep. 14th, 2002 10:53 am (UTC)
Re: Hmmm...

Hmmm, I think if she meant mushy blobby fat, she would have put it in, I agree! *lmfao* Has a nice ring to it though...

Still, I dont know if that bit reaaaly fits in!

Perhaps something about his big deliciously broad shoulders wrapped around you, and like holding you! Mmm... broad shoulders... *salivate*
Sep. 16th, 2002 10:40 am (UTC)
Re: Hmmm...
Sep. 16th, 2002 03:57 pm (UTC)
Oh i dunno much about poetry, but i know what i like...... and i wish i had someone who would write stuff like that for me so if he thinks like me then yep its a winner.... :-) ;-)
Sep. 16th, 2002 05:08 pm (UTC)
Thanks Chris!
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